Final Project 3 feedback

Paul

look @ notes in email
Lip Synch - Nice! Looks like a great first pass. We'll talk about this part on Thurs.
Left Arm 50-end needs loosening, overlap, etc
right hand better finger pose for paper hold

Rais
0-1 seconds
fix hand pose - too distracting / needs to be more natural
fix left elbow to emphasize line of action better

1 sec - 4 sec
Needs cleanup
Too much is happening - simplify the gestures here
"one thing right" - try to hit 2 of the 3 beats here (3 seconds)
Right wrist is broken, too floaty/wobbly
elbow is wobbly/poppy

5 seconds - you know what?
needs subtle anticipation and better slow out - use the dialogue for timing
find a better line of action here
right wrist broken during transition

You're fired!
support action with upper body twist/lean
support with root as well
try shifting weight during slap/ side to side
Better flop in chair, make motion quicker with better/longer slow out and better flop @ end


Yalda

start (1-3 sec)
1st footstep- char is off balance
tosro movement needs smoothing
better shovel anticipation - better first shovel pose

"I'm burying you" needs head/torso gesture - listen to sound and use motion to sell it.

First dirt dump into ground - add a dip in the shovel and root movement, support gesture more w spine

mid-section bwtn 1st shovel and 2nd shovel - simplify this, have him hold pose, do head/eye action, then go to 2nd shovel anticipation


Jesse
start
left hand fingers - simplyify - start w good curl, open @ halfway, end with curl/clench/fist. This
of her squeezing the word
try moving whole character keys forward a few frames (4-10) on "night" and "holy"
0-2 seconds - left wrist rotate is too stiff
Holy - find better arc in torso
Lip synch needs mouth widen and purse to overlap jaw
2nd hip shift at end wake up step seems to forced and strong


Greg
frame68 eye weirdness
couple more frames @ end for settle
60-70 right arm/elbow more sticky, less pop up
push nervous face on bleed
more overlap and animation on lip/wide-purse control