Final Project Critique

Jackie

adjust second gesture ("jobs") - does not read as well as the first ("food")
Maybe try a downwards moving gesture (hand drop?)

140-150 - knee wobble
175-185 - lose foot shift
Heads are falling off
- lessen spine bend
- left arm in air - find a really good pose, try not to twin too badly
- improve finger poses - angular and mad!
Head are falling off anticpation - try hands on head, state of shock look on face
Make sure you have good contrast between "our pets" and "heads are falling off" - think explosion of anger




Taki

Walk -

contact pose
- rotate hips to assist leg rotation - hips are rotated wrong way
- counter-twist spine to compensate and keep head point forward
- make sure contact foot is hitting the ground
- back knee is turned too inwards


Passing position
- root of character should shift in X so center of grav is over supporting leg
- root should rotate in Z to show the weight being on one foot
- spine should counter rotate to compensate for hips
- head counter rotates- keep head level from front view
- figure out arm rotation from front - outwards curve is more feminine, inwards more masculine
- foot needs subtle rotation and translation in X to give it more character
- remove toe roll and rotate foot forward instead - toe roll should be only when foot is about to leave ground

Motion -

-Adjust Y curve of root - smooth it out - high on passing, low on contact, don't crouch him too low on contact

-Head needs subtle overlap and drag
-Flatten foot sooner after contact pose
-Google "Keith Lango + Power Centers" and think about how to incorp. that into your walk
-Lean root fwd more
-animate the wrists
-animate the fingers
- animate the root moving forward and backward in Z to help complement the force of the walk.

Run -

Same notes on hips and spine for walk - twist, contraposto, etc

conact-

passing-
-root too low
-leg too crumpled
- supporting knee should be straighter and more to the front


- make sure head overlaps spine
- try to keep head centered from front
- get root moving forward on Z
- exxagerate hip bounce in Y, while keeping upper spine stable
- cleanup spine and root curves - make sure the motion is smooth
- frame 4 - both ankles broken
- from front view, knees go all over






Paul

- right hand cleanup - needs drag and overlap
- frame 50-70 - make paper read motion smoother - blend arm, elbow and wrist motions better
- eye look needs work on 60 - 90 - too locked in place. Maybe try keeping them on Kevin Spacey
- get hips slightly more invested in the lean to side gesture - too locked right now
-frame 35 - support wrist rotation with a bit of elbow rotation
-last digit of pinky is too crumpled/curled
-15-25 - finger uncurl could be smoother
- "practice" needs work - mouth wider on "pra"
- "Hadn't had the practice" should be smoother - 3 mouth opens
- subtle spine lean support on "practice"
- try adding some subtle Y rot on head
- try imrpoving arcs in head
- right arm seems totally locked on turn
- add subtle Y tran on root to help sell existing up/down arcs


Rais

- start - bend right arm/elbow lower to complement existing line of action
- rotate right wrist outwards (subtle) to help with line of action as well
- 95 - finger is going through head
- anticipate "why" with lips more by getting them pursed a bit sooner
- 93 - head is too leaned to side
- 103-107 - right wrist translation seems locked, maybe have him stretch the wrist fwd a bit more
115-140 - left wrist needs work - fingers should relax/curl sooner
120-140 - blend all left wrist rotation axis better
90 - eyeballs seem to be in weird postion - maybe fix head first to fix this
-180 - spine/shoulders should twist to complement slap gesture
-the flop @ end needs work - more curl and overlap in spine, possibly straighten the spine at the end of the slap and use existing curve value for drag here
- lose pursed lips @ end of "right", maybe try holding the end syllable instead
-105-140 -right arm drop should be more simple - find a better arc, quick drop motion
- finger pose on "fired" could be more interesting - think angry!
- blend wrist slap rotation into end of wrist slap translation better.
- "You Know What?" is all about a quick, asserive transition from the point gesture to him standing upright. Quick, snappy.
- frame 1 left elbow pop.
-0-110 - left fingers are swimming and thumb goes thru desk in first 80 frames


Yalda -

34 - sell "buring you" with rest of body more, otherwise wrist position @ 34 looks odd
0-40 - left hand is floaty on shovel - lock it more
65- remove double shover tap, just sell the single shovel dump and let the dirt do the work.
100-108 - get the line of action in the shovel to rotate more into the action
115 - left elbow pop
"Shut Up" needs more work on overlap on spine, head, and shovel
210 - rotate hips more into shovel swing
38 - maybe try rotating shovel so line of action is a bit more upwards
90-100 - lose eye look back down @ grave, extend eye roll instead
40-56 - eyes stare straight ahead, maybe have them glance down @ grave sooner?
shovel floaty at the end
support end surprised gestures with spine a bit more
90-120 - hips do weird wiggles - simplfy anim to support weight transition
207- spine is too bend @ top
176- rotate shovel (actual geometry, not circle) to dump dirt and ease tension on wrists


Jesse

50 - wrist and mike should roll outwards more for overlap
1280- check right clav - too high?
1415-1450 - try adding subtle horizontal head arc (arcs?) during head rise
1605ish - left foot should stay longer OR hips should move over sooner - right now, off balance
1469 - need to show "T" and end of "Night"
1415-1475 - left wrist cleanup, overlap/offset fingers on close and open, remove unneeded finger/wrist rotation
1490-1570 - improve arc on root throughout motion
1535 - she bonks herself on the head w mike - cleanup motion
1495ish - improve arc on mike hand
880ish - head pop up is abrupt, smooth out
fade out/trail audio a bit at end